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Guillaume UBALDI
University Town, NUS – 28 College Avenue East
Singapore 138598
Singapore 138598
Phone: +33.6.12.34.56.78 / Email: guillaume.ubaldi@grenoble-inp.org
Singapore,
September 9th, 2012
Dear Sir or Madam,
Presently as a third-year student at Grenoble Institute of Technology - Industrial Engineering, I am writing this letter in the context of an internship in L’Oréal. Within the framework of my academic training, I will have the opportunity to carry out an internship as an Assistant Engineer from January, 2013 and for a duration of approximately 3 months.
I am contacting you because I am particularly interested in experiencing your production centre based in the Paris area. Improving my knowledge of the industrial world within the engineering department of one of the most prestigious cosmetic groups represents an attractive challenge. Besides, I am a regular consumer of numerous L’Oréal products, which I find at the same time essential and innovative.
For the mission you propose, you are looking for an innovative person, highly motivated, fascinated by L’Oréal and avid to bring his/her own stone to this monument : I can confirm, in all modesty, that I possess these assets. As part of my studies, I have already carried out a project during which I have designed a tactile table for cooking. This experience will help me because your mission appeals to someone who has already been trained to innovation and new product development. In addition, I am a great fan of your company and of the proportion it has assumed the last years. This admiration can only reinforce my motivation and my desire to perform.
Finally, in a world where interpersonal relationships are growing, I strongly think that communication has an important role to play within a company. Aware of this, I am currently attending some Professional Communication courses at the National University of Singapore. I am pretty sure it will be a helping asset for this mission.
Therefore, if you entrust me this mission, it would be with a lot of motivation and conviction that I would take up the challenge. You can contact me at any time through the e-mail address you will find on the top of the letter, or directly on my mobile phone.
I look forward to your response and I thank you for your particular attention.
Guillaume UBALDI
Edited #1: Thanks Tasha ;)
Edited #2 : Brad's advices
Edited #2 : Brad's advices
Hi Guillaume!
ReplyDeleteHaving read your letter, I feel that it is a good-written piece of work. There is quite a bit of flattery (eg. “entrust me with this mission”, “most famous and prestigious cosmetic”) , haha.
The format is good. Though, I would suggest that you bold the whole heading and I don’t think that you need to put “Singapore” before the date. You should also put L’oreal’s address or email address there too (depending on whether you are sending it through mail or email).
Overall, I can tell that you are really interested in joining L’oreal.You brought up your interest, loyalty to L’oreal, the experience you have and how you can value-add to them. I think that in the third paragraph, you could mention specifically 1 design project that you did which would impress them.
Just a few grammatical mistakes:
• “PRESENTLY AS A THIRD-year student..”
• “January 2013 for a duration”
• “ “interested in EXPERIENCEING your “
• “considered as A precursor TO”
• “ESSENTIALLY BE beneficial”
• “putting my theoretical knowledge INTO ACTION at your site”
• “I POSSESS these assets”
• “at any time THROUGH the e-mail address"
Good job Guillaume! :)
Tasha,
DeleteThank you very much for your comment !
You really helped me with these grammatical mistakes ;)
I edited my post in consequently.
See you tomorrow. Cheers !
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